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Forgot That I Use To Fall In Love with You



You Came
Winter came after a short autumn bringing the cold and sadness deep into my heart. Don’t know when and how it started, but since the day you came into my life. My life started to light up a little bit; I don’t feel the darkness inside me anymore. I started to walk past the place where I used to see you standing and you always come and light up my day.
After that we start to see each other more often. I love to talk to you, because at that time I can feel the warm and happiness that you give me. Just like every other typical day, you asked me to wait for you in front of the park, but this time it was different then before, because this time you told me all of the words that I want to hear from you…
Our love
Our love is very sweet and passionate. The leaves still falling, the bench that we use to sit is still there, the children’s laugh… everything is still there… and you are still there waiting for me. We sometimes get mad, but you are always the first one to come explaining and apologize. When am happy, you are the first person that I share the happiness, when there are something happen, am the first person that you will talk to about, but there’re one thing that you never tell me about, and share the pain by yourself.
Everything
Everything that you say stays inside of me, and the light that you bought into my life is just like a shooting star at night, light up everything around it… We use to hang out at the park, I don’t know when I started to love you, and I also don’t know when I start to love the park. Sometimes we go to the park by ourselves, but sometimes we go to the park with our friends, I don’t even know when your best friends become my best friends. I like to hang out with our friends, but hanging out with you is the best out of everything. I love everything about you, and you love everything about me… I guess we love everything about us.
Without a Goodbye
But when we were about to say hello to the spring, you just leave me behind, like a shooting star that disappears from the night sky, everything return to normal, the darkness surrounded me once again…
I sometimes wonder to myself: Is it because you gave your heart away for someone else, or is it because your feeling to me just dies away, or is it because I done something that am not suppose to do…? A lot of questions pop into my head. I waited for you every day in the park, hoping that you will come with your smile just like everyday, and one day I think to myself that... the darkness always wait for daylights to come, but maybe… daylights is already gone… gone with out a goodbye
The Missing Pieces
I still don’t know how to answer the question that I use to ask myself before. After you gone without explaining anything… after all this time, I still walk to the same park, the leaves still falling; the bench that we use to sit is still there; the children still running around laughing… but there is one thing that can never be the same anymore, there is something that I find missing in the park, and I still trying to find the missing pieces that is now … gone.
Hallucination
When I was walking in the streets, I have a feeling like you were around watching me, but when I turned and take a look, I can’t see you anywhere. Maybe it is my hallucination, am thinking about you too much now. Sitting in the bench that we use to sit, remind me of everything that you use to say. “We are going to stay together forever!!... Oh that’s rhyme, together forever” “Tah- Dah! This is for you, I know that you like sunflowers, so last month I plant a lot of sunflowers on my backyard, I hope that you will keep this forever… happy birthday!!” you told me on my birthday party and then give me a hug. “If you get sad, just cry out loud, because that will make you feel better, if you need someone to lean onto… Remember that I will always be here for you ok… and remember that I will always be here waiting for you” you told me that when we first meet. You are such a liar, I start to cry, cry so hard that it hard for me breath…
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